Comments...

Everybody (or so I think) has at least one thing they are embarrassed to show because it is so bad. This first draft of Kibou is probably it for me.

While I have been going through it and cleaning it up a (little) bit, I haven't edited very much at all as far as content. One instance of dialog (page 10 of Chapter 1) and perhaps a couple of extremely horrid grammatical or spelling mistakes - but that's it.
(As far as cleaning things, though.... This is pretty bad, 'cause pencil smudges over time. Oh well! Make the best of it, if you can.)

Anyway, in favor of keeping this short:

There is something on every page to get snarky about, nitpick, or generally laugh at for being bad. (Or so I think.)
Enjoy.

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Random notes...

Title: The story was initially called "Suteki na Hayashi" (Wonderful Woods) and was going to be part of a larger collection known as Today's Possibilities. That never happened.

Story Differences: That's for you to find out. :D